Poor reporting of news by intern?

[Leepee]

http://tnp.sg/news/story/0,4136,206723,00.html?

 

Lorry overturns after crashing into barrier

It collides with van before hitting metal fence

July 03, 2009

 

SHE was driving along Braddell Road when she heard a bang at the back of the van.

 

Madam Ho See Luan, 55, a vegetable supplier, said: 'Then the van shook violently. I stopped the van on the right lane to check what happened.'

 

It turned out that a lorry had collided into the back of her van at about 2.45pm yesterday afternoon .

 

Madam Ho was on her way home from her workplace in Bukit Batok. She lives in Serangoon.

 

Her husband, who declined to be named, was in the van with her.

 

When Madam Ho and her husband got out of the van, they saw that a police car was already there.

]>>This is Singapore Police efficiency for you! Get out of car, police already there! SOLID...give the police a Tiger!

 

'We saw a large blue lorry had crashed through the metal barrier and overturned on the centre divider,' she said.

 

 

SHOCKED: Madam Ho says her van shook violently.

'The police officers were helping the driver out of the lorry.'

 

Madam Ho said she was driving at not more than 60 kmh when the accident happened.

 

'I drive along this road every day, and there are always many cars on this road so it's hard to drive faster than that,' she said. ' I didn't even see the lorry in my rearview mirror.'

 

When The New Paper arrived at the scene at about 3.30pm, paramedics were attending to the lorry driver.

 

A police spokesman said they got a call at about 2.45pm about an accident involving a van and a lorry along Braddell Road, towards Bartley Road.

 

The lorry driver, a man in his early 40s, was taken to Tan Tock Seng Hospital with injuries.

 

Police investigations are ongoing.

 

The police are appealing for witnesses to call the Traffic Police Hotline at 1800-5471818.

 

Han Su-Ying, newsroom intern

Edited July 3, 2009 by Leepee

[Mustank]

i don understand

[Hamburger]

written by primary 6 student.........

[Babyt]

Lorry overturns after crashing into barrier < Lorry overturned after crashing into barrier.

It collides with van before hitting metal fence . < it collided with a van before hitting metal fence.

 

sldnt past tense be better since it has already happened?

[Friendstar]

when i first read it, i feel its okay.

 

but yes, there'r lots of errors

[Gearoil]

What do you expect?

 

Young graduates are getting lousier by then year as they come out of graduation, not to mention the great influx of FTs for any Sinkie jobs availiable.

 

But one thing is for sure, your copy of Shxtty Times or whatever newspaper is going to cost more by the year!

[Espire]

must be M.I.C lah this intern....

[Ichibawa]

Think they write better Singlish than proper English

[Help1]

seems that everything is in point form minus away the bullets

[Simplesilver]

Piang. I had to read over like thrice before I understand what I was reading!

[Drive_carcar]

I think the intern read too much Wan Bao.... it's not so much the grammar or use of words, but the way he / she sequence the events. Takes too much effort to figure out what's happening.

[Happily1986]

there is pretty much to be desired when it comes to the editorship of the new paper as well. Their incorrect choice of words leaves me flabbergasted sometimes. yes i know you're a tabloid but sure when it comes to using of terms, you got to be precise?